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Post by mai on Dec 2, 2005 17:56:00 GMT -5
I wrote this for my story and I was wondering if you guys thought it works. It is to the tune of amazing grace and the first verse is the real verse, not one I made up:
Amazing Grace, how sweet the sound,
That saved a wretch, like me.
‘Twas lost, but now am found,
Was blind, but now, I see.
Amazing Grace, a glory pure,
Grand as cathedrals’ dome
My heart was torn, you found the cure
And now, I lead thee home.
Amazing Grace, you’ve made me new
You’ve helped me find my way
My heart was lost, my hopes were few,
Come to my arms, and stay.”
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Ed
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I'm losing my mind and I don't think you could save me this time
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Post by Ed on Dec 2, 2005 18:01:57 GMT -5
It's good. I made up a song... about... people. I think it's saved on my sisters compy.
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Post by yokohoshi on Jan 5, 2006 21:38:41 GMT -5
here is my latest shot at musical composition. It should be noted the tune starts out depressing then gets hopeful.
Morning light breaks the clouds
black shadows fall across my face
from the unforgiving bars of my prison
I'd shrink from the light if I could
but there's no where I can go I can go
I look out across meadows and lakes
over the mountains and into the skies
I long for the things I can't have
I long for the sky
I long to fly away
and though it's impossible I keep on dreaming
and hoping my dreams will come true
That someday I'm going to spread my wings
and fly away
I close my eyes and banish the thoughts of bars
and for a moment I'm free flying free
over the meadow trailing my wings in the sea
someday I know someday I'm going to fly away far away
I dream of that day when I will fly away
When I sleep all I see is the sky
and I fly away on another days wings
over the meadows trailing my wings in the sea
and in that moment in the dark night when I sleep I'm free
Cause I'm dreaming of the day when I will fly away
each morning is a rude awakening to my dreams
and each night I fly away on another days wings
the wings of that day when I will finally fly away finally free
Someday I know someday I'm going to fly away far away someday.
so there it is the end. Hope you liked it.
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Post by mai on Jan 5, 2006 22:14:52 GMT -5
I loved it!
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Post by yokohoshi on Jan 6, 2006 18:18:45 GMT -5
Thanx.
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Post by yasamufasa on Jul 6, 2006 17:06:40 GMT -5
it is really good, yoko. it is much better than anything i could do. bravo!
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Post by fireflame on Jul 7, 2006 0:05:43 GMT -5
i like it to yoko more then yasa
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Post by yasamufasa on Jul 8, 2006 13:02:25 GMT -5
and how do you know that??
oh, well. i'll give this one to you keri. you win.
i'll win one of them one of these days, though.
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Post by fireflame on Jul 8, 2006 13:57:24 GMT -5
nope never
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Post by yasamufasa on Jul 8, 2006 14:13:06 GMT -5
my luck can't be that bad!! *exasperated stare* i will one of these days!! *tries to be dramatic, failing misrably*
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Post by fireflame on Jul 8, 2006 23:12:07 GMT -5
nope
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Post by yasamufasa on Jul 9, 2006 0:34:11 GMT -5
grrrrrrr i will win, someday.
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Post by fireflame on Jul 9, 2006 16:50:40 GMT -5
again nope
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Post by yasamufasa on Jul 9, 2006 20:40:00 GMT -5
. . . .
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Post by fireflame on Jul 10, 2006 10:51:05 GMT -5
i win
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Don't touch Ed's dirt...
